Monday, September 12, 2011

Wish Ghost

The Revenant, 1949, Andrew Wyeth



Wish Ghost



As if winking could    undo

unmake

return the past



as if fading out            detail

                                    crispness

line



could induce               forgetfulness

forgiveness



A future of honey and stasis

The sweetest roses have barbs




thanks to Tess for the prompt and picture
more Magpies  here

27 comments:

Dave King said...

Brilliant! So well crafted and beautifully understated. Love it!

Jinksy said...

Delightfully delicate interpretation of this Magpie.

Kenia Cris said...

I've read many on the prompt but your piece is brilliant, sensitive, adorable Isabel!

Kiss you. <3

izzy said...

Yes it did occur to me that he was playing with a wink! thanks-

jane.healy said...

Great post - I wish the past could be changed as easily as a wink

Laurie Kolp said...

Isabel- Beautiful...I really like the ending.

jabblog said...

Brilliantly understated.

Brandee Shafer said...

Love it!

Brian Miller said...

excellent...love the structure you used...very effective and the closing lines are brilliant...

120 Socks said...

Brilliant Isabel - great poem!

thingy said...

Oh, I love this. A wonderful take on the prompt.

Jacqui Binford-Bell said...

Love your formatting of this poem. Poetry has a visual side that we often step around on the internet because blogs can so mess up that format - especially when linked or networked.

Nice Magpie

Mimi Foxmorton said...

So very nicely done! ;)

Jo Bryant said...

this is brilliant - love the use of space to underline the words

Lyn said...

A beautiful flow of words..like giving up secrets...I love the "crispness"of it all!!

Tumblewords: said...

Wonderfully insightful.

Susie Clevenger said...

Love this...there are those who think they can erase their errors with a wink and a phrase and the passage of time

christopher said...

As one who never plays with form like this, I want to admire the crisp and clear way form works for you in this poem.

Stafford Ray said...

"A future of honey and stasis"
If only.

Mary said...

Excellent poem! The past is always the past, but forgiveness is always good!

Trellissimo said...

Something quite sad at the heart of this. Lovely poem.

Tess Kincaid said...

Oh, wow, nice. I especially like the last line...

Helen said...

Content and form? I would grant you an A+.

ds said...

Lovely. It takes a painter...

The Gooseberry Garden said...

elegant lines, powerful delivery.

The Gooseberry Garden said...

Hohoho,

What charming poetry you have posted here.

Invite you to share 1 to 3 poems with us, anything could fit the theme of object,

Cheers.
Hope to see you in.

Happy Writing..
xoxox

emanita01 said...

Oh, I do LIKE this :-D