Monday, April 25, 2011

RTA - Mag 63


R-T-A

I
wet road
street lamps turn to paint:
red, green and amber
smeared across tarmac

II
black moon texture at eye level
sucking heat
etching stone, face and heart

III
blue lights flash off
post and tree, glass leaps
from black to white to black dazzle

IV
the siren caws: too late too late
quiet now
the knock at someone’s door




prompt from Magpie Tales 63:  http://magpietales.blogspot.com/

35 comments:

LKHarris-Kolp said...

Wow- powerful, intense!

~laurie

annell said...

Very strong, that sudden shift, "the knock at someone's door." Just know it is something bad! I've heard it, been frightened, late at night, don't want it.

anthonynorth said...

I agree. powerful words here.

Olivia said...

That's a strong image sketched.. I am scared already!

Anxious!!
Hugs xx

thingy said...

Wow. An amazing tale unfolding.

Bee's Blog said...

Yes, I can see it and hear it now. Very well written leaving nothing to the imagination.

Lolamouse said...

Ooh, that knock at the door made my heart skip a beat.

Brigid said...

Powerful piece, excellent take on the prompt.

Donna B said...

Oh this sucked me in and set my imagination on fire. Excellent!

DebbyMc said...

Wow. Chilling and powerful.

hedgewitch said...

I like the way you've used the colors of light to tell a story with very little else, and managed to tell such a terse yet eloquent one.

Willow said...

I am sucked into your words, the geography of your poem(s), the events, lots of color and texture, intense, frightening, I am holding my breath.

Reflections said...

Such a chilling intensity! Beautifully sculpted.

Lyn said...

Each goes into a complete mood, a world..I could keep reading this list!!

Martin H. said...

A multi-coloured traumatic experience. Nicely done.

Ann Grenier said...

Oh! I still feel the reaction to your words as I write this. Absolutely frightening. Such a creative vision of the lights and the burst of an accident.

versebender said...

A harrowing tale told through a collection of images. What a wildly inventive take. This is really good. Vb

Helen said...

Yours is an amazing interpretation of the photo!!!

signed...bkm said...

Wonderful tale in words limited only in space on the page...worlds unpon worlds here..thank you..bkm

Steve Isaak said...

Vivid, excellent.

Máire T. Robinson said...

Wow. Very powerful. Skillfully done.

earlybird said...

Wonderful use of the colours. I love 'the siren caws: too late too late'

Dave King said...

Lovely interpretation of the image. Well done.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

I was there and didn't want to be!
Brilliantly desciptive!

Anna :o]

jabblog said...

. . . and it all happens so quickly! Very well expressed.

Tess Kincaid said...

Colorful and tragic. Wonderful imagery.

Jinksy said...

And so accidents happen...

R. Burnett Baker said...

Stunningly expressed, and painfully imagined! Very well written!

lucychili said...

ouch sad

ladynimue said...

Amazing lines .. loved how it unfolded at each level ...

Trulyfool said...

Isabel,

Very much like the image work!

Trulyfool

Margaret Pangert said...

I love this kind of poetry that tells a story using only imagery. Hard to do but is incredibly evocative. Each verse makes that part of the kaleidoscope jump out at you! Ultimately, the lights sparkling in the rain, the black rain creating its own vision, the flashing and dazzling of the blue, black, and white, are just too much. Shhh! The wild exuberance must be stopped... Shhh! Great poem, Isabel!

Jingle Poetry said...

outstanding.



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Jingle said...

outstanding.



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Jingle Poetry said...

outstanding.



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