R-T-A
I
wet road
street lamps turn to paint:
red, green and amber
smeared across tarmac
II
black moon texture at eye level
sucking heat
etching stone, face and heart
III
blue lights flash off
post and tree, glass leaps
from black to white to black dazzle
IV
the siren caws: too late too late
quiet now
the knock at someone’s door
prompt from Magpie Tales 63: http://magpietales.blogspot.com/
35 comments:
Wow- powerful, intense!
~laurie
Very strong, that sudden shift, "the knock at someone's door." Just know it is something bad! I've heard it, been frightened, late at night, don't want it.
I agree. powerful words here.
That's a strong image sketched.. I am scared already!
Anxious!!
Hugs xx
Wow. An amazing tale unfolding.
Yes, I can see it and hear it now. Very well written leaving nothing to the imagination.
Ooh, that knock at the door made my heart skip a beat.
Powerful piece, excellent take on the prompt.
Oh this sucked me in and set my imagination on fire. Excellent!
Wow. Chilling and powerful.
I like the way you've used the colors of light to tell a story with very little else, and managed to tell such a terse yet eloquent one.
I am sucked into your words, the geography of your poem(s), the events, lots of color and texture, intense, frightening, I am holding my breath.
Such a chilling intensity! Beautifully sculpted.
Each goes into a complete mood, a world..I could keep reading this list!!
A multi-coloured traumatic experience. Nicely done.
Oh! I still feel the reaction to your words as I write this. Absolutely frightening. Such a creative vision of the lights and the burst of an accident.
A harrowing tale told through a collection of images. What a wildly inventive take. This is really good. Vb
Yours is an amazing interpretation of the photo!!!
Wonderful tale in words limited only in space on the page...worlds unpon worlds here..thank you..bkm
Vivid, excellent.
Wow. Very powerful. Skillfully done.
Wonderful use of the colours. I love 'the siren caws: too late too late'
Lovely interpretation of the image. Well done.
I was there and didn't want to be!
Brilliantly desciptive!
Anna :o]
. . . and it all happens so quickly! Very well expressed.
Colorful and tragic. Wonderful imagery.
And so accidents happen...
Stunningly expressed, and painfully imagined! Very well written!
ouch sad
Amazing lines .. loved how it unfolded at each level ...
Isabel,
Very much like the image work!
Trulyfool
I love this kind of poetry that tells a story using only imagery. Hard to do but is incredibly evocative. Each verse makes that part of the kaleidoscope jump out at you! Ultimately, the lights sparkling in the rain, the black rain creating its own vision, the flashing and dazzling of the blue, black, and white, are just too much. Shhh! The wild exuberance must be stopped... Shhh! Great poem, Isabel!
outstanding.
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outstanding.
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outstanding.
Join poetry potluck,
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Happy May!
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